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Girl what is we doin????
This was a painful read. I don't even know where to begin lmao
pls no we don't need Alfie Deyes living on £1 a day again, I don' think she realises how privileged she is to be able to do the tiniest things like 'appreciating nature' during her morning walks, most people don't have free mornings to walk for an hour because they have walk and as a woman I wouldn't feel safe going on a walk alone because of where I live atm
This is awful. I love a good flowery prose sometimes, but this is genuinely laughable.View attachment 1391542
Girl what is we doin????
This was a painful read. I don't even know where to begin lmao
"the morning dew glistened on her finger tips. Like grease" bby girl what kind of imagery is thatView attachment 1391542
Girl what is we doin????
This was a painful read. I don't even know where to begin lmao
I wonder how often she has grease on her finger tips. Where does this image come from? Why grease? why??
Is she high?View attachment 1391542
Girl what is we doin????
This was a painful read. I don't even know where to begin lmao
Oh, I don't know actually. It's a bit underpolished, and could do with a couple of bits here and there cutting out (she's laboured the waves anaogy a bit too far.) Some of the description is slightly contradictory. She seems to be going for a feeling of disappointment or a lost past but she's managed to pull in slight revulsion ('like grease') which I don't think was necessarily the aim. [ETA: I think something like 'tears of dew glistened on her fingers' or similar may capture what she's going for, if the purpose of the passage is disappointment at a lost past.]View attachment 1391542
Girl what is we doin????
This was a painful read. I don't even know where to begin lmao
It reminds me a bit of Steinbeck, when he waxes on about the land. Cut down considerably I could see this being a good section towards the end of The Clergyman's Daughter or midway through Coming up for Air (though in its current state it definitely does not fit Orwell's style), or some other book that has a return to a place. There are definitely bits of this I very much like, though altogether it is a bit much. Good potential.
Is it self indulgent? Yes. Is that automatically bad? No. Does it need considerable editing and a rethink of purpose? Most definitely.
Gosh, that’s a confusing piece of writing. It also shows a lack of gardening knowledge but I think that’s the least of the problems.View attachment 1391542
Girl what is we doin????
This was a painful read. I don't even know where to begin lmao
maybe I should become an editor.
but I’m not good at poems etc. and analysing texts.
Imagine reading 300 pages of this. I just skimmed this and I'm already exhaustedView attachment 1391542
Girl what is we doin????
This was a painful read. I don't even know where to begin lmao
Not to be petty, but if you’re planting from seeds in ‘spring’ the chances of you having a fully grown rose bush able to produce actual roses by June the same year is slim to none considering the germination process alone takes about 6 weeks lmfaoView attachment 1391542
Girl what is we doin????
This was a painful read. I don't even know where to begin lmao
Step over, Rupi Kaur - we have a new Insta poet on the horizon!View attachment 1391542
Girl what is we doin????
This was a painful read. I don't even know where to begin lmao
ThE rOsEs NeEdEd HeR
AnD tOlD HeR
NoT tO cRy
OvEr SpIlT mIlK
There's so many confusing things in that piece. Every time I think that this isn't that bad, she throws in another confusing metaphor, or jumps to a completely unrelated thought. There are definitely bits I like and with some work, I think a good writer could make them really nice. But some parts, like the grease line, or suddenly switching from they didn't need to her to they needed her because they smelled different (the logic is so confusing too), ruin it for me.
Wow, I don’t think I’ve ever cringed this hard for someone. I feel like she could benefit from an actual creative writing course where she could get real critique from people who aren’t up her ass like her followers. She’s never going to grow or improve when all she has is people telling her she’s wonderful.
Then again, she doesn’t really want to grow or improve or become a better writer - she wants the praise that she thinks comes with Being a Writer, and the sales of course, so she can pretend she’s making her own way in the world and not just coasting along on her rich girl privilege.
Then again, she doesn’t really want to grow or improve or become a better writer - she wants the praise that she thinks comes with Being a Writer, and the sales of course, so she can pretend she’s making her own way in the world and not just coasting along on her rich girl privilege.
Firstly, she goes around in circles for a long time. Then when she feels like she's losing the point, she batters you with it. Then goes back around in circles to say the same thing again.
It's clear she's trying to imitate other authors rather than find her own style and that's always a recipe for disaster. However I suspect that that's exactly how she wrote her uni essays: reading loads of critical essays until she absorbs their style, read Blakeney's essay, write out her own essay sentence by sentence comparing it to scholar/Blakeney, hand in with the illusion of academic skills.
It's messy because she's writing for the sake of it, not because she has anything at all to say.
It's clear she's trying to imitate other authors rather than find her own style and that's always a recipe for disaster. However I suspect that that's exactly how she wrote her uni essays: reading loads of critical essays until she absorbs their style, read Blakeney's essay, write out her own essay sentence by sentence comparing it to scholar/Blakeney, hand in with the illusion of academic skills.
It's messy because she's writing for the sake of it, not because she has anything at all to say.
Lmao
she went to McDonald's with her mom to celebrate her grades the other day, maybe that's where she found the roses She needs to date jade alreadyIs she high?
The worst part about reading this was that I could hear it in Rubbetta's stage voice while picturing her violently shaking her head with a wide-eyed unblinking stare.View attachment 1391542
Girl what is we doin????
This was a painful read. I don't even know where to begin lmao
And she said she has no idea what she wants to do in the future. I thought the point of a degree was to do the job you want to do.... how is she gonna chose what to study next year if she doesn't know what she wants to do. I'm confused.
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